Stalled!

Given how much I’ve written and some personal life events, I don’t want to write this right now. Over the writing of the parent and sibling I left points untouched, I’ll just leave an outline/list of things to clarify in this chapter or subtree.

Plot Points

• Jim’s recovery - don’t scene skip, or flashback it.

  • Similar to the sibling chapter, have him live as a pet a while.

    • Significantly, keep it open for the next points

    • Not Permanent

      • He does recover, just a step

  • Have a ‘come to Jesus’-type moment

    • Once he recovers, have him go a radical shift in thinking

      • Notably, give him a reason to be very passionate about being a hero

        • could be with a flashback to his childhood
        • If a flashback, don’t tie it to the current situation
        • I’m going for a ‘lesson’ of ‘life events can change you’ not ‘everything is already laid out’
• Marls’ and Ange’s backstory - give a hint as to why they do what they do?
• Princess and Franklin - Who the hell are they?

• Franklin’s wife

  • Who is she?
  • What’s her role here

• Jim has to recover and join the heroes

  • Probably a bad idea to have him walk away then return

    • not good at writing those, convicingly.

  • Would be nice to have him work with other heroes

    • not keen on describing a new character, but would add depth

• Use better imagery

  • Don’t tell, show

  • except in cases where that is not worth it

    • Like graphic scenes
    • Or gore, or sex
    • Very much a discretionary thing

• Less non-sequiteres

  • Those are confusing
  • Usually do follow, but the link is in my head and not on paper.

• In a child, add a rescue where he’s in Ange’s position.

  • Barring the guilt
  • He doesn’t have that power.

• Initially, I wanted to base the Ange-Franklin relation after All Might-Deku from MHA

  • Has since drifted
  • Keep the mentor and shared secret aspect

• Just for fun

  • One mission could be a stealth mission in a ranch or something

    • not a country boy, don’t want to go completely off the mark

  • Another idea, a counter-strike operation

    • Hate, isn’t usually centralized though
    • Furthermore, it’d also require a larger cast.

  • Final idea, have Jim uncover a conspiracy

    • Cheap
    • Need to have fun in writing

• Almost forgot, clarify the mission statement

  • Fights against bigotry to hybrids

    • I’m not sure on that term